Saturday, October 18, 2008
My Biodata
My name is Liu Zhengning. I was born in Nan Chang, Jiang Xi Province, China. I lived in my hometown for the childhood and received preliminary education there. At the age of seventeen, I received a scholarship and moved to Singapore for tertiary education. After one and half year's bridging course, I entered National University of Singapore and chose mathematics as my major. In the university, I have received mathematics training from the mathematics department. In addition, I also studied economics, which had widened my knowledge scope and probably would be my future research area. My other interests include travelling, photo shooting, basketball and table tennis playing, etc. I was described as a cheerful, frank and responsible person by my friends.
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Hi Zhengning,
You have repeated the word "received" thrice. This makes your biodata a little bit boring.
I think instead of talking too much about your academic matters, you can talk more about your personality strengths, achievements and awards that you get, and perhaps your working experiences, co-curricular activities which have helped you in shaping your personality. =)
Ya, I agree with you. Then which word should I use here? any suggestions?
My suggestion is instead of saying" I recieved Mathematical training" you may say " I pursued my Bachelor degree in Mathematic". Instead of saying " I recieved my primarily education" you may say" I entered primary school".
Would you want to include your co-curriculum activities as i knew that you stayed in hall for past few years. I bet that will definitely show your qualities such as marketing&presentation skills since you were in the hall marketing team. It's just my 2 cents.
I agree with what was mentioned by the others. Perhaps you may want to mention the skills gained from your CCA besides highlighting the activities you participated in. To embellish your biodata, you may specify the particular event that you were involved in or for your case, you may want to name the scholarship you have received. This can also make your biodata sound more credible and real.
Perhaps not on the specific name of the scholarship as it may not be nice if the scholarship company doesn't want him to disclose.
I was just thinking that your entry did not seem very convincing enough for a reader to understand your pride in your work. Maybe you can give some specific roles in your acad/non-acad work? It'll certainly augment your pride in your description!
Hi Zhengning,
I notice that 75 words were used in describing your educational background. You could have been more concise in your description of your education. For example, it is common knowledge that you would receive "mathematics training from the mathematics department" since maths is your major. So, there's no need for this sentence. You can leave out insignificant information relating to your "preliminary education" as well as the bridging course because bearing in mind the word limit, you need to decide what's important enough to be included and what to exclude.
As Kah Chun has mentioned, why not include your achievements or involvement in your hall activities to give us an insight into the skills that you possess?
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